When You Don't Tell

My name is Annie and this is my third attempt Oh dear actually I think it is my fifth attempt to write my story, The first one I gave to my friend Beth who teaches English so I knew she would be able to put all of my literary mistakes right. Beth then put my story onto a disc I asked her what she thought of it? Beth said it made her cry but it needed more detail on the caricatures and it was not to bad for a first attempt.